SinisteRing's Homework

So I decided I would do your assignment for no apparent reason. I'll be posting it here...so others can modify and help edit it and such. Ummm, here's the start, I'll edit it as I get around to it - October 31st right?

Quote :

Throughout recorded history nothing has ever gotten done without someone leading the way. Someone putting themselves on the line and taking a position where they are then put on a pedestal in some regards. Some led their followers to failure, disparity, or even death while others led their followers to success and prosperity. Some leaders had an ideal or belief that they upheld and used that as their inspiration. People like Jesus, Abraham Lincoln and Martin Luther King. While others kept their followers by using methods of distortion, fear and manipulation. These include Hitler, Nixon and Name. Although the former group may be considered good leaders, in comparison to the latter they are nowhere near as effective.

Fear, manipulation and general playing on peoples emotions is far more effective because it changes the opinions of even those who disagree with your ideals. Human beings are far more prone to emotion than they are to logic and reasoning. Playing on these emotions will get things done faster than convincing someone that something needs to be done. A good leader and an efficient leader are two different things.

Jay.J wrote:

October 31st right?

Yep. Thx babe.

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Throughout recorded history, nothing has ever gotten done without someone leading the way. A leader is someone who puts his or herself on the line and takes a position where he or she is then put on a pedestal in some regards*. Some led their followers to failure, disparity, or even death while others led their followers to success and prosperity. Some leaders had an ideal or belief that they upheld and used as their inspiration. These include*2 people like Jesus, Abraham Lincoln and Martin Luther King; *3 yet others kept their followers by using methods of distortion, fear and manipulation. These include Hitler, Nixon and Stalin(?). Although the former group may be considered good leaders, in comparison to the latter, they are nowhere near as effective.*4

Fear, manipulation and *5 playing on peoples emotions is far more effective because it changes the opinions of even those who disagree with your ideals (always?). Human beings are far more prone to emotion than they are to logic and reasoning (reasoning?). Playing on these emotions will get things done faster than convincing someone that something needs to be done. A good leader and an efficient leader are two different things.

*(The first sentence felt out of place, this is just a suggestion though)
*2 (there was no verb, it was not a complete sentence before)
*3 (this was a dependent clause w/ "while" so i changed it, but it's only a suggestion)
*4 (You might want to site evidence if possible, or draw an analogy... to start, I'd recommend looking at Machiavelli's "The Prince" for ideas/sources)
*5 (superfluous IMO) Word removed was "general"

Overall, okay, but it needs evidence more so than just stating facts. There is no actual facts and it is highly opinionated. If the paper is based on opinion, then oh well... disregard what I say. Otherwise, try to find a way to either logic or find sources for your words.

I'm doing SinisteRing's homework, and he asked me so I randomly started typing. He's in...grade 11? What I posted there took me about 3-5 minutes. Hey...do you want to write it for him? LOL. It's supposed to be an "Expository essay" talking about an effective leader. There are no actual requirements. And it's not due till Oct.31st and it's only 1-2 pages...

Wow, he has a MONTH to do it? Lulz...

I KNOW, if I actually sat down and thought about it...2 hours tops. An hour for a half assed one.

Dragonheart91 wrote:

Wow, he has a MONTH to do it? Lulz...

This is one of 7 parts that I am to write. It's out of 200 points, and this is 20 of them. However, since I transferred into the class just recently, she's only making me 3 of the 7 projects... thus 60 points total.

If you want to do the other parts, I could do that as well. They're just as broad and short.

So I got Mid-terms next 2 weeks, so you might want to think about doing it yourself...but I might still be able to do it in the last week if you want to wait, and trust me not to procrastinate it till the last day.

Nope... I just got done writing a 6 page literacy narrative... I'm good. I have to write a two page critique of it now. It's really weird to talk about myself in the 3rd person. I.e. "The Author" or "My last name" writes... used to saying "Elliot" or "Donne" or even "Plato" or "Derrida" writes... just yeah.

Jay.J wrote:

I might still be able to do it in the last week if you want to wait, and trust me not to procrastinate it till the last day.

I trust you.

Why not just do it yourself? It'll save time and make you a better person.

AquaAscension wrote:

It'll save time and make you a better person.

I agree, it'd save time. But the deadline is way far away, and I'm gonna do the other 2 projects first.

How would doing it make me a better person?

sin a good person?
*insert sarcastic laughing*

It would make you a better person by gaining experience in writing, by not cheating, and by thinking and developing argumentative and analytical skills, as well as format skills etc. It would also make you feel prouder opposed to not doing it yourself - which in turn could boost your confidence and then make you be a better person.

The real question is besides less work - what do you get out of me doing this?

a better grade I'd imagine.

What makes you think I'm a better writer than SinisteRing...I'm going into Psychology and Neuroscience...I do little writing, nor have I written for my high school newspaper or anything. He could do just as well, if not better than me. At the very least he has more time to work on it and make it better over time.